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PERSONALITY CLASH II
zero
How pitiful! Look at him.
The boy can't stand on his own.
Such a shame! What on earth?
He could be better than this!
Who's going to help him?
Who else?
***
two
The inner fight...
The clash in my head...
The merciless warriors...
The things no one else can see...
My head hurts.
My heart is heavy.
My body's burning out.
My eyelashes become important.
The war will never stop.
I will never find my peace...
I can't see a way out.
And nobody will help me out...
***
one
I am the funny guy.
Compared to me, you're plain.
I'm going to make you laugh,
one way or another.
rib.
a rib.
Bust a rib.
I am the weird guy.
The stranger next to you.
You're never going to like me,
in this state of mine.
hate.
I hate.
Things I hate.
Remember? I'm the "dancer guy".
I hop around like a bunch of gorillas.
Your people know me for this,
and I don't care at all.
me.
disgust me.
You disgust me.
I am the silly, nervous piece of meat.
I spill an ice cube on my undies.
The chair is so soft,
but I didn't sit on it.
him.
slap him.
Please, slap him.
I am the pointless fighter.
Whatever I may do, I take the hits.
At least someone realized this,
since it's nothing really special.
genius.
a genius.
Not a genius.
I am the techno-freak.
The things I know are not in you.
You think you flatter me, but
all you do is hurt my feelings.
all.
you all.
Slam you all...
***
three
How could someone give me shelter,
when I don't have any clues?
How could I inform you on this,
since I can't tell which is which?
Switch.
Will the things I say now,
remain the same forever?
Or some malicious entity
will grab the opportunity?
Move.
Three billion germs invade my body.
My stomach's a strip of tape.
Don't reveal it, be the same,
the figures will never notice.
Arise.
Don't worry, it's just me.
Take the orders without a question.
You'll see, everything will fade,
and, tomorrow, you'll live as before.
Yeah, right.
***
five
Why should I change?
Stop it.
Is he here?
Why should I change?
Stop it already.
Okay, he's right. This has to stop.
We have to change.
Some of us will have to leave.
But who?
...who else...?
***
four
The suffering goes on.
Fighting it would be useless.
And I won't stop it,
since I'm not him.
I like it here.
Always chatting, and running, and spinning around.
After all, I'm the center of surprise.
People like me.
Why should I stop it?
I can't see why he's complaining.
Normal people never tell me to stop it.
Just a trick, and that was all.
A typical person m--
T H E P E R S O N A L I T Y C L A S H
why should I change
SWITCH
since it's nothing really special
SWITCH
nothing will remain
SWITCH
one way or another
SWITCH
we have to change
SWITCH
the war will never stop
SWITCH
since I don't know
SWITCH
why should I change
***
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oh oh ohhhhhh hhhh hhh hh h...
the next day
My head hurts.
I'm jealous of you all.
zero
How pitiful! Look at him.
The boy can't stand on his own.
Such a shame! What on earth?
He could be better than this!
Who's going to help him?
Who else?
***
two
The inner fight...
The clash in my head...
The merciless warriors...
The things no one else can see...
My head hurts.
My heart is heavy.
My body's burning out.
My eyelashes become important.
The war will never stop.
I will never find my peace...
I can't see a way out.
And nobody will help me out...
***
one
I am the funny guy.
Compared to me, you're plain.
I'm going to make you laugh,
one way or another.
rib.
a rib.
Bust a rib.
I am the weird guy.
The stranger next to you.
You're never going to like me,
in this state of mine.
hate.
I hate.
Things I hate.
Remember? I'm the "dancer guy".
I hop around like a bunch of gorillas.
Your people know me for this,
and I don't care at all.
me.
disgust me.
You disgust me.
I am the silly, nervous piece of meat.
I spill an ice cube on my undies.
The chair is so soft,
but I didn't sit on it.
him.
slap him.
Please, slap him.
I am the pointless fighter.
Whatever I may do, I take the hits.
At least someone realized this,
since it's nothing really special.
genius.
a genius.
Not a genius.
I am the techno-freak.
The things I know are not in you.
You think you flatter me, but
all you do is hurt my feelings.
all.
you all.
Slam you all...
***
three
How could someone give me shelter,
when I don't have any clues?
How could I inform you on this,
since I can't tell which is which?
Switch.
Will the things I say now,
remain the same forever?
Or some malicious entity
will grab the opportunity?
Move.
Three billion germs invade my body.
My stomach's a strip of tape.
Don't reveal it, be the same,
the figures will never notice.
Arise.
Don't worry, it's just me.
Take the orders without a question.
You'll see, everything will fade,
and, tomorrow, you'll live as before.
Yeah, right.
***
five
Why should I change?
Stop it.
Is he here?
Why should I change?
Stop it already.
Okay, he's right. This has to stop.
We have to change.
Some of us will have to leave.
But who?
...who else...?
***
four
The suffering goes on.
Fighting it would be useless.
And I won't stop it,
since I'm not him.
I like it here.
Always chatting, and running, and spinning around.
After all, I'm the center of surprise.
People like me.
Why should I stop it?
I can't see why he's complaining.
Normal people never tell me to stop it.
Just a trick, and that was all.
A typical person m--
T H E P E R S O N A L I T Y C L A S H
why should I change
SWITCH
since it's nothing really special
SWITCH
nothing will remain
SWITCH
one way or another
SWITCH
we have to change
SWITCH
the war will never stop
SWITCH
since I don't know
SWITCH
why should I change
***
sHryshijsdmbxosgksoprjgsjbdogksor
sqdgahsErkgsorhksonkfspogkhsnhset
ssfsaaorjgiaLrjgiaerjgoareijgaoor
sehsajhsihjtisjfbsroPdkgpsogikset
oh oh ohhhhhh hhhh hhh hh h...
the next day
My head hurts.
I'm jealous of you all.
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I know, the title is pretty lame, it seems like "the second part of a trilogy" or something like that, and a title such as "PERSONALITY CLASH v.2" would be more appropriate. However, while "PERSONALITY CLASH II" has similar content to the original, the two poems are vastly different as to what they represent.
The first "CLASH" stands as a raw (yet accurate) narration of the experience, and that's because I wrote the first things that came in mind as the wounds from that day were still fresh. In other words, I cared more about throwing those awful moments on the deviation rather than taking care of how it reads like and how well it grows on you.
The second "CLASH", however, goes beyond the above. Thanks to the support of my friends (most notably =GaioumonBatou, who wrote a detailed analysis and critique on the original), I managed to transform the confusing scribblings of a person who struggles with the fight inside his head into one of my best works so far.
It's complicated, it's scrambled, it's haunting, and I enjoy reading it over and over again. This doesn't happen with the original, because it's more faithful to the events it's based upon, and therefore it hurts me every time I look at it. Yes, the revision of the poem was pretty hard for me (the scars are still present), but I think it was worth it.
Critique and comments are welcome. I submitted this as an entirely new submission, instead of updating the original. I want them both
And I'm sorry if these comments didn't make any sense to you. My English will always suck.
The first "CLASH" stands as a raw (yet accurate) narration of the experience, and that's because I wrote the first things that came in mind as the wounds from that day were still fresh. In other words, I cared more about throwing those awful moments on the deviation rather than taking care of how it reads like and how well it grows on you.
The second "CLASH", however, goes beyond the above. Thanks to the support of my friends (most notably =GaioumonBatou, who wrote a detailed analysis and critique on the original), I managed to transform the confusing scribblings of a person who struggles with the fight inside his head into one of my best works so far.
It's complicated, it's scrambled, it's haunting, and I enjoy reading it over and over again. This doesn't happen with the original, because it's more faithful to the events it's based upon, and therefore it hurts me every time I look at it. Yes, the revision of the poem was pretty hard for me (the scars are still present), but I think it was worth it.
Critique and comments are welcome. I submitted this as an entirely new submission, instead of updating the original. I want them both
And I'm sorry if these comments didn't make any sense to you. My English will always suck.
Comments7
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I like the both of them. The first one is my personal favorite. Not to say I don't like this one. 
You put a lot of feeling into your poems. That's good. Keep it up!
You put a lot of feeling into your poems. That's good. Keep it up!